麻烦大家帮我看一下这篇文章有什么语法错误吗
有些地方不懂你想表达什么，只能改成这样，将就下吧
In my opinion, love is everywhere, whether in reality or network, there is love. But different people have different opinions about love; the key point to love is mainly to see how you treat it. I think to love a person have to trust each other and mutual understanding, to respect each other's thoughts and differences. Someone says that love is not forever, but I don’t think so. We have a long time to love, because we can protect our loves, just like Vingo's wife in the text. She is a nice woman, when her husband was in jail, she didn’t give up, and brought up their children by herself. I think we can use one word to describe her -- great. And from these, we can recognize how great their love is. So I think the true love is never give up.
Please institute the following changes:
1. Kunming's streets were very crowded.
2. There were many policemen (on the streets perhaps?)
3. Firstly
4. Uncle and aunt.
5. Since the roads were very crowded, it took us twenty minutes to cross the streets.
6. When we arrived at the house, we were so tired that we did not visit any other place.
7. My aunt is a good wife.
8. On the second day...
9. Then, we rode on the small boat to visit the lake.
10. There were many activities in the expo park, there were very interesting. It is a very beautiful and famous site in Yunnan.
11. We were very sad that we couldn't stay there for a long time. However, I was very happy to have visited Kunming.
Look, I don't know where to start. When we first met, I couldn't have imagined how good the things are going now. It is too good to be true. My happiness is getting closer and closer to me gradually. Whenever I think of that scene I feel very happy. What about you? Are you happy? I'll remember every word you've ever said to me.Because that is the most precious gift I received. I have the capacity to love many people. But you are and will always be the one I love the most. The passage will end here.There aren't many words but it's sufficient to express my feelings which you can experience through my words.
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